None really. Seems solid enough for campaign fiction. Let me reread again if you want structural comments from a hack who can't write to save himself. Content is 'blegh' for me, but that's purely because I don't much like the exalted setting. Having said that, you did seem to make a little too much of it, IMHO. Perfect for a bit of 'intro to the campaign' text, probably. --Vitenka